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Author Topic: 1x01, "Breathe"  (Read 27061 times)
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theredshoes
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« Reply #30 on: February 18, 2008, 02:09:51 pm »

Crossover fanfic!

Does someone have a hat they might drop so I could hypothetically possibly write that?  Not that I would post or link anything to it here or do it anywhere nearby.  No.

(Yes, I wrote Scully-meets-Starling fanfic once.  ....What?)
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« Reply #31 on: February 18, 2008, 02:11:04 pm »

They probabaly circled each other warily at the Academy, if not sooner, but I'll bet they're friends now.

Oh God picture Chaz and Reid in some kind of absolutely arcane trivia can-you-top-this informal contest.  Oh dear.
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« Reply #32 on: February 18, 2008, 02:16:21 pm »

Crossover fanfic!

I can see it now...

Fits, doesn't it? Seeing as they are the people Down the Hall. Smiley

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« Reply #33 on: February 18, 2008, 02:17:11 pm »

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Lau noted the pregnancy on the whiteboard. Reyes frowned. "Hospital employee, or patient. We need the mechanism for the asphyxiations. Have we heard from Frost?"
Lau looked back over her shoulder, as if it were a casual gesture. "Worth? If she gets technical, you'll at least have a chance of following the conversation."
"Will do. Give me the number?"
Brady tucked his chin and frowned at Lau. She gave him back a shot of wide-eyed innocence. Brady sighed and turned to the whiteboard.

oh no

oh no....

Oh that better not be the initiation not with my Daph no no....


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Lau played that out in her head again. Into the restroom, and a stall...but then what? If you weren't there to pee or shoot up--and there'd been no evidence of drugs--why stand around in a bathroom stall?

Also, ha, damn-betcha I knew what that was.  Emma smokes/smoked, or knew someone who did, I bet.
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« Reply #34 on: February 18, 2008, 03:35:20 pm »

Damn, that was good! 

(and back to work)
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« Reply #35 on: February 18, 2008, 03:58:18 pm »

Oh that better not be the initiation not with my Daph no no....

*coughs*

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Also, ha, damn-betcha I knew what that was.  Emma smokes/smoked, or knew someone who did, I bet.

I never smoked, no. But nicotine is a mean mean tyrannical dominatrix of a mistress who does not recognize anybody's safe word, and boy, were my sympathies with the victims. (Okay, except maybe the one guy.)
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« Reply #36 on: February 18, 2008, 04:37:11 pm »

Aha. Now I know why Chaz didn't take me up on my invitation to LA. Poor baby! I think I'll innocently ask him what happened...
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« Reply #37 on: February 18, 2008, 04:54:50 pm »

And the results are in:

Chaz: Considering how well my last trip to LA went, I might meet you in Carlsbad, if you don't mind!

me: "How well DID your last trip to LA go, Chaz?"

Chaz:
It involved CPR.

0.0

And that's all I'm at liberty to disclose on the internet...
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« Reply #38 on: February 18, 2008, 05:33:03 pm »

One thing I liked about this was how different Daphne Worth was to her livejournal persona. I know the LJ stuff is happening AFTER this, so she will be more at ease with the team and herself, but from her LJ interactions she presents herself in a very different way.

Obviously, the internetz is another space to exist in and one in which you can be another aspect of yourself. I think the livejournals are one of the best features of this project - we are getting the chance to see a bunch of the off camera stuff (for the LJ crew at least) which makes these characters so much more "alive".
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« Reply #39 on: February 18, 2008, 08:18:32 pm »

OK, I finished reading episode 1 finally (had to read Act V while downloading a big honking file that I had to wait for anyway), and it's time to squee.  Yep, Emma, you did real good.  Set 'em up, knocked 'em all down, told me just enough to tantalize and keep me coming back.  I don't want to send money from work; we have this nannyfilter that seems to base its rejections on a roll of 20-sided dice, so I'm not taking any chances it'll cut in just when I hit the money submit.  So I'll hit the donate button when I get home.

I've got to say that turning that episode into a script would be very little work; it's pretty visual already, and the pacing works as is; you might need to adjust dialog a little for timing, but I doubt very much.  It rocks as is.

At one point during the final action I started thinking of the title as advice to me, because I was getting so caught up in the story I was forgetting everything.

Now, venting: squeeeeee!



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« Reply #40 on: February 18, 2008, 08:51:07 pm »

Just finished reading ep1. I think it was more than Worth (pun intended) the wait.
What a great start. Great job.
WOW!
and now I need to wait for two weeks for the next show.
(Barton slowly walks back to his classroom, thinking of ways to use this in a lesson plan)
14 days and counting down.
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« Reply #41 on: February 18, 2008, 09:58:08 pm »

Heh. Read it from a hotel lobby cause my laptop died. Good stuff. Suspicions were confirmed about Chaz (well, not confirmed, but more leading information to support my thoughts), and I would get along with Brady. Even if he was an Army MP.  Wink

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"I'm not going to die for Reyes's bring-'em-back-alive campaign. You do as you please. But if you fail to pull your weapon and someone else hurts for it, believe me, there will be no hole deep enough to bury either the investigation or you."

That's close enought to what we lived by. Everyone goes home after shift.

Great work Emma, although I expected no less.  Grin
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« Reply #42 on: February 18, 2008, 10:14:36 pm »

Wow.  Dang.  Just wow! 

I've got to reread it for all the little things. 

Poor Daphne!  She's so much more comfortable with herself in the LJs.  It'll be good watching her get there.  Chaz, too.

Using Frost as an initiation is just EVIL!  I started snickering the moment it came up. 

Not enough Hafs in this episode!  Next episode, more Hafs, I hope? 

Better than most pilot episodes - I think a lot of that is because I already knew some of the characters pretty well from the LJs. 

Everyone involved is amazing!  Particularly Bull this time.  Lots of praise to go around though!
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« Reply #43 on: February 18, 2008, 11:17:20 pm »

I really adore the last two acts.  It's so fun, watching Daphne and Chaz realizing, hey.  This person is just as insecure as I am.  Since they both thought the other one had it made.

Also, despite appearances to the contrary, Chaz may well be the toughest, most ruthless person ever.   Ever.
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« Reply #44 on: February 19, 2008, 12:18:06 am »

Fabulous!!!

Want more NOW.

I keep thinking of something else and I get a flash of Daphne or Duke and realize I already read what's there and there isn't any more yet.  (sob)
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